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Sweforce wrote:I have this nagging feeling that Opalstorm just succeeded in her mission, that is her real mission, not the one she was ordered to do. Stillstorm is hard but fair but Opalstorm is just an ass that probably should never have been promoted. How do you stop an undeserving rank climber without a proper cause to do so? Set them up for failure and let them crash and burn! If Fragile Storm is behind this with the intention for Opal to fail then she is indeed a screwed sceamer, something that would explain Fragile's success despite essentially being a desk jockey herself.

Or something else entirely.
I suspect this was the case. Otherwise, they would had put an independent diplomat Mizol like Tempo in charge of the mission, rather than Torrai Sorimi Shitstorm.

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Sweforce wrote:I have this nagging feeling that Opalstorm just succeeded in her mission, that is her real mission, not the one she was ordered to do. Stillstorm is hard but fair but Opalstorm is just an ass that probably should never have been promoted. How do you stop an undeserving rank climber without a proper cause to do so? Set them up for failure and let them crash and burn! If Fragile Storm is behind this with the intention for Opal to fail then she is indeed a screwed sceamer, something that would explain Fragile's success despite essentially being a desk jockey herself.

Or something else entirely.
Ironically, if she had been plotting "how can I get this pain in my ass out of my hair with a clear-cut case of insubordination bordering on mutiny," this is exactly what she would have done, but this one is gonna blindside Fragile Storm, because she's not, generally, in the habit of plotting against her own subordinates. She saves her plotting for the shells and occasionally Jardin. (She's never acted on those plots. But she's come up with a few.)

She sent Opalstorm in charge of this mission because Opalstorm is a genuine walking regulation dictionary - cast from the same mold as Arnold Judas Rimmer, only actually competent and knows the regs. She also wouldn't know tact if it crept up behind her and goosed her: therefore, if there were any flaws with Jardin's ships, serious or otherwise, she figured that Opalstorm would compile them into a huge list, annotated and sorted by severity and with a list of exactly whom to blame for them.

She wasn't actually counting on Jardin having taught his crew to snap-to attention and salute superior officers. Even if she had been, that's perfectly permissible by the Loroi standards of a commander being able to impose some of their native customs on their command; she's certainly done some of that, which her crew no doubt found weird because she and Fragile Spear are from one of the archaic clan holdout traditions.
It would be seen as weird on first blush, like someone doing the Full Rimmer, but on second reflection, most Loroi who don't have a tungsten rod rammed right up their ass would get that, obviously, a human commander would not be able to perceive a standard Loroi telepathic salute and thus, would be unable to tell the difference between a subordinate officer showing proper deference to a superior, and a crewman who was being insubordinate and slouching off.

As she hadn't foreseen that Jardin's crews would have been taught to snap-to and salute - let alone that they'd have been taught it so well, and morale would be so high, that the breveted Loroi superior officers in the flotilla would be expecting that form of salute in lieu of the standard telepathic one - she certainly couldn't have predicted Opalstorm's apologetically furious response. Which she would have, if she had seen it coming, because Opalstorm is as generic as a Loroi officer gets: except for being a complete and total failure at inspiring anything except fear, misery and outright hatred in her subordinates, she's a model of a "fleet officer." Unfortunately, because of her famous, living-legend mother, nobody's properly taken her to task for her failings, figuring that she just needs some rough edges ground off - though in fairness, she's also never lost it to this degree of magnitude before. This may well be the turning point that sets her on the path to competency... Assuming she doesn't get shot for mutiny, anyway.

To be clear, the others sent to take accounts of the other vessels aren't going to be nearly this freaked out by it.
Krulle wrote:What a show of "we are Humans, and we do things differently. This is simply how we Humans do it, as you already observed yourself. I made sure you understood that before I send you back to write a report that will make Opalstorm look very much like an Elephant in a china shop where restrictive diplomacy would have been necessary. And once your report has been read and acknowledged, evaluated and archived, only then will we send Opalstorm as a prisoner back, so that her side of the story will have it very difficult to fall on open ears.
This is your chance to find a new superior - use it.
Dismissed."

Very diplomatic, without ever using the direct words.
Wonderful, I am sure Tempo will approve.

Thank You, again.
He was very much attempting to channel Jean-Luc Picard during that exchange, I'll grant. (Or more likely, some actor from the 2150s who was channeling an actor from the 2110s who was channeling some actor from the 2060s who was channeling Sir Patrick Stewart.)

So yes, Tempo would approve. And upon learning that he was inspired to do by a human actor rather than any superior officer (Captain Hamilton struck me as more of the "sit up straight! Stand up for yourself, girl!" type) she would probably be highly amused, her amusement growing in proportion with Fireblade's annoyance.
raistlin34 wrote:I suspect this was the case. Otherwise, they would had put an independent diplomat Mizol like Tempo in charge of the mission, rather than Torrai Sorimi Shitstorm.
It wasn't actually, but bear in mind that this wasn't seen as a diplomatic mission, but a fleet audit, so a juniormost staff officer like Opalstorm was, in theory, the appropriate tool to send for the job. It's just a shame that she is such a tool.

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Thinking about it, it would probably be fun seeing a bit from Opal's perspective. Sitting there in the brig trying to figure out what the heck just happened to her.

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Sweforce wrote:Thinking about it, it would probably be fun seeing a bit from Opal's perspective. Sitting there in the brig trying to figure out what the heck just happened to her.
Hrn... Yeah, I could swing that.

I set that up basically to show that five years of war amongst the Loroi have turned Jardin into someone who can be a proper commander when he needs to be. I'll grant that being Captain at 25 is probably a case of him having been over-promoted because of exceptional associations, much like Opalstorm, but the difference is that Opalstorm doesn't have a nanogram of humility in her body and fully believes she deserves her rank, whereas Jardin knows damn well he's a jackass cut-up and relies heavily on more experienced and knowledgeable officers - to wit, Fireblade, Tempo, Beryl and Talon - to get things right.

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As requested, a bit of Opalstorm simmering in the tiny brig aboard Swiftwind.



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Torrai Sormimi Risot-Soni, whose spoken name was properly rendered as Opalstorm, was in a state approximating shock.
She had not had a good day. Indeed, this was, quite possibly, the worst day of her life. She rubbed her wrists where the restraints had bit into them, shaking her head. She felt out, with her mind, and sensed the mind of a Loroi on the other side of the bulkhead containing her door - she hadn't moved since she had been placed there. Opalstorm didn't understand this; she was, to her outrage, securely confined. She saw no purpose to posting an armed guard outside the door. She tried to probe the other Loroi's mood, but could sense nothing, save that the guard had hardened her mind against intrusion, a clear and egregious act of hostility.

This is an absurdity and an outrage which brings shame to your crew and ancestors, she sent to the guard. No response was forthcoming, and Opalstorm gritted her teeth, sitting on the thin cot provided, pondering her options. Briefly she toyed with the possibility of affecting an escape. She was not entirely helpless; she had some telekinetic ability of no small power, but she had been rejected as an Unsheathed for her lack of focus at range. She could crush a small robot at about twice arm's distance, and that was about it... But it would have let her reach through the wall and incapacitate the guard, and... Then what?

Would she be able to telekinetically fumble the door open, take the guard's weapon? Possibly. But then what? If that Unsheathed who seemed to have been completely corrupted by his bizarre, alien masculine wiles caught up with her, she'd be a smear on the walls. If he had returned the armed guards to their posts, and they remained loyal to the pink freak, it would be unlikely she would be able to shoot her way out, even with the element of surprise, and the human naval base on which the corvettes were docked was a great unknown factor. Would they stand aside and let her pass? Bar her passage? Would they actively attempt to subdue or kill her?

No - though it infuriated her and left her boiling over with outrage, she would not be affecting her own departure any time soon. He was out of line, she thought, angrily. Just some alien freak. He had no right to order me off his vessel. All of this crew are deficient - perhaps they're deficient in the head? Should I consider them all traitors? She fumed, angrily, leaning back; she wasn't going any where, so she might as well attempt to eke some comfort out of the situation. Standing up, she pushed the cot to the far wall, folded it over on itself, sat upon it crosslegged and removed her boots. So arranged, she clenched her fists and toes, and relaxed them, rythmically, breathing deeply, seething with anger and resentment, but forcing herself to become calm.

She had, perhaps, become over-enthused in attempting to discipline the crew. One or two of them mocking her with that obscene alien gesture, failing to salute her and acknowledge her rank telepathically; she would be right to discipline them for, but the entire crew? On second thought, it was unlikely that fifty Loroi would all have become so lax.
Clearly, their judgment was impaired. Being confined with the alien for so long had affected them - perhaps something pheremonal, something the ship's environmental filters had failed to isolate and filtrate, or perhaps the human race was able, somehow, to exert some form of subtle will-influence on Loroi, related to their inability to read sanzai?

Either possibility was equally likely. No, she had erred in attempting to discipline every member of the crew individually and as a group. A few of them would have been justified, but clearly they were impaired somehow, through no fault of their own. Well, perhaps there was some fault to go around; if the impairment were pheremonal, then the crew responsible for environment control needed to be punished, but the rest had no culpability. They would all need a lot of time retraining, however.

Clearly, though, discipline had broken down aboard the Swiftwind, to an alarming degree. Only a few of the crew had seemed properly cowed when she attempted to put them in their place; even when she became harsher and harsher, only a few of them adopted a proper mien of respect for her authority. The amount of doubt and questioning of her authority had been enraging - was her uniform not sufficient proof?! - and an alarmingly large fraction of them had grown alarmingly hostile and defiant of her. Outrageous - and then that alien freak had returned.

She could see why he was so dangerous - he had an exotic, alien allure that she herself couldn't deny; hardly a beautiful face, but one oddly attractive in its ruggedness, but he was tall, built like a woman, an exotic alien so unlike Loroi menfolk. Yes, she could see the danger. No doubt so long in proximity to him would have corroded any warrior's self-control, if she had not approached him already hardened for confrontation. She wondered, with a start, if that was the secret to the strange loyalty he commanded; if he used sexual access to himself as a means of rewarding whatever he deemed good behavior. It would explain why his crew seemed so sickeningly loyal to him that not only that Unsheathed bodyguard but the gunner's mate had seemed positively joyful when he ordered them to draw their sidearms and take her prisoner.

She knew damn well just how difficult it was to engender loyalty. Subordinates were a pack of impossible hooligans, always shirking their duties, or thinking venomous thoughts about their superiors, it was frankly a wonder the shells hadn't overrun the Union already. It was an exhausting occupation, maintaining discipline among her own subordinates. Still, she had to persevere. She had to - she was burdened not only with command, but with a legacy to live up to; she could not be a failure. If it meant that ceaseless vigilance against the slightest laxity and remorseless swift fury when it was found was the price, then she would pay them; after all, all great commanders had to bear such burdens. Captain Fragile Spear certainly had to have an exhausting time disciplining those below her, such as Opalstorm, who was no stranger to the harsh edge of the Captain's mind, and rightly so. After all, the embarrassing disciplinary failures on the parts of her subordinates not only reflected poorly on her, through her they reflected poorly on Fragile Spear, and through her, on Fragile Storm.

Although this morning's chastisement was, in Opalstorm's opinion, unwarranted. An officer of her rank had every right to unilaterally order the termination of anyone who posed a clear and present danger to the vessel, and that... Freak the shells had experimented upon certainly qualified - after all, they had somehow induced a great many Unsheathed to turn upon and assassinate their senior staff, how could anyone who had been so tampered with be allowed to live? Opalstorm began reviewing regulations in her head - as a prisoner, she had a nominal right to demand access to the books of regulations, but she doubted that a crew which had fallen so far under an alien witch's charm could be counted upon to acknowledge that. Fortunately, she didn't need it - although her tablet and comlink had been confiscated, she had very nearly the impeccable memory for rules and regulations of a Listel. She could challenge Fragile Spear's decision to overrule her orders to have that... Creature dubbed Sisto-liper; "Snow White," executed...

But it would be fruitless, she knew, at least as long as the fleet was out of contact. Fragile Storm was Fragile Spear's sibling, and they were raised in the clan-ways of old. Their loyalty to one another was certainly greater than that to abstract rules. In a way, she couldn't fault them for it; if her exalted mother ordered her to violate a regulation, Opalstorm knew that she would do it, and if necessary, would bear any appropriate punishment meted out.
The difference, of course, being that if her exalted, legendary mother were ordering her to act in violation of the rules, then it would be because some unforeseen situation had emerged in which the rules were prescribing incorrect actions, and Stillstorm had the experience and vision necessary to discern such situations. Clearly, Fragile Storm did not, or she would certainly have overruled her sister and had the tampered-with Loroi destroyed as the threat to security she was.

No longer boiling over with explosive indignation, Opalstorm felt herself calmer, her course clearer. Not even the human sex-appeal-witch would be able to hold her indefinitely; at the very least, her absence would be missed, and inquiries launched. She would stoically bear the all-but-insufferable indignity of this farce arrest and charge, and be returned to Retribution. Once there, justice would, she was certain, swiftly prevail. She would be freed, and the crew of Jardin's vessels recalled for rehabilitation. Jardin himself...

It was entirely too much to hope that he would be executed. In a way, she supposed, notwithstanding his popularity among the Emperor's circle, his actions might be considered justified in extremis; if she found Loroi subordinates so hard to control, an alien must have found them impossible, unless he had some kind of unique leverage over them; even if it meant something that was surely distasteful. Or perhaps he had enjoyed it; she neither knew, nor considered it relevant. He would simply be returned to his own people, and surely Fragile Storm would instruct them to keep him away from Loroi. Perhaps, if it were biochemical, a pharmaceutical solution would be found; even if not... Well, she had received a frank and appalling briefing on just how badly the Union required aid, any and all aid; they would simply have to work with the bewitching alien menfolk kept at arm's length, and prepare for the inevitable conflict with them once the shells were dealt with. Perhaps they could subjugate the humans.

She twisted her lips up in a smirk; indeed, if human menfolk were so irresistible to Loroi warriors, once the race was properly vassalized, perhaps Loroi vessels could keep one or two aboard for morale purposes. It would greatly simplify her task of keeping discipline if she had some sort of apparently-irresistible alien reward to dangle for good behavior. Then the need to constantly discipline her subordinates would be alleviated, as they would, surely, to some degree reign in their own unruly and wild impulses in the hope of pleasing her and by so doing, gain access...

Opalstorm reached up, stroking her ear thoughtfully. This possibility bore some... Consideration. Still, Jardin's treatment of her was unacceptable. It was not the alien's place to presume that he had a proper right to command a Loroi warship, and his being granted command was an extreme circumstance. She would have to lodge a complaint most severe. He wouldn't be executed; likely, he would not even receive harsh punishment, which grated on her, but she was certain that he would likely be pushed away, where he could no longer seek any glory. It would have to suffice. She would have to exercise patience, which galled her, but until then there was nothing she could do, save, perhaps, sleeping. As she was not tired, she rearranged herself on the cot, placed her feet together, heel-to-heel, and began to go through breathing regimens, her mind calling up regulation numbers and reviewing them for utility in her situation. There would be a reckoning; not immediate, perhaps not soon, but she was sure the rules were on her side. And if Jardin was, for political reasons, beyond the reach of her reckoning, perhaps the reckless commander who had placed him in charge of Swiftwind, or Fragile Storm, would not be.
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EXCELLENT! "The TYRANT'S LAMENT"~ "Oh WHY does not everyone understand the burdens that beset ME on all sides?!? Can they not see that all MY efforts are to enforce unyielding order in the face of their criminal laziness and mendacity?!? I must bear the toil and effort of beating them all into submission for the sake of the whole! I am soo underappreciated!"...

hahaha! loved it!

Oh.. and thank you for the o mage{sp?} to Snow White.. didn't know how to spell her name in Loroi! :)
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sunphoenix wrote:EXCELLENT! "The TYRANT'S LAMENT"~ "Oh WHY does not everyone understand the burdens that beset ME on all sides?!? Can they not see that all MY efforts are to enforce unyielding order in the face of their criminal laziness and mendacity?!? I must bear the toil and effort of beating them all into submission for the sake of the whole! I am soo underappreciated!"...

hahaha! loved it!

Oh.. and thank you for the o mage{sp?} to Snow White.. didn't know how to spell her name in Loroi! :)
Really? I figured you'd chosen her name very carefully, because both words appear in this (extremely limited) Lexicon of the Loroi Trade Language.

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You said "proscribe" (forbid) when you meant "prescribe".
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Carl Miller wrote:You said "proscribe" (forbid) when you meant "prescribe".
:oops:
Thanks for catching that. I am anything but infallible.

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sunphoenix wrote:EXCELLENT! "The TYRANT'S LAMENT"~ "Oh WHY does not everyone understand the burdens that beset ME on all sides?!? Can they not see that all MY efforts are to enforce unyielding order in the face of their criminal laziness and mendacity?!? I must bear the toil and effort of beating them all into submission for the sake of the whole! I am soo underappreciated!"...

hahaha! loved it!

Oh.. and thank you for the o mage{sp?} to Snow White.. didn't know how to spell her name in Loroi! :)
I admit, when I read the part about "stupid sexy alien" I couldn 't stop laughing :lol:
Opal is soooo tsundere.

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raistlin34 wrote:
sunphoenix wrote:EXCELLENT! "The TYRANT'S LAMENT"~ "Oh WHY does not everyone understand the burdens that beset ME on all sides?!? Can they not see that all MY efforts are to enforce unyielding order in the face of their criminal laziness and mendacity?!? I must bear the toil and effort of beating them all into submission for the sake of the whole! I am soo underappreciated!"...

hahaha! loved it!

Oh.. and thank you for the o mage{sp?} to Snow White.. didn't know how to spell her name in Loroi! :)
I admit, when I read the part about "stupid sexy alien" I couldn 't stop laughing :lol:
Opal is soooo tsundere.
It's not every day you get to use the phrase "Masculine wiles" in all seriousness. Yesterday was just such a day...

Now... Oi vey. I'm trying to work out how in the hells I'm going to work the events of Cydonia Rising into WtDwJ, even as a cameo/background. Trying to figure out how in the hell it takes them 5 years to get to Earth... Whatta nightmare.

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ShadowDragon8685 wrote:
raistlin34 wrote:
sunphoenix wrote:EXCELLENT! "The TYRANT'S LAMENT"~ "Oh WHY does not everyone understand the burdens that beset ME on all sides?!? Can they not see that all MY efforts are to enforce unyielding order in the face of their criminal laziness and mendacity?!? I must bear the toil and effort of beating them all into submission for the sake of the whole! I am soo underappreciated!"...

hahaha! loved it!

Oh.. and thank you for the o mage{sp?} to Snow White.. didn't know how to spell her name in Loroi! :)
I admit, when I read the part about "stupid sexy alien" I couldn 't stop laughing :lol:
Opal is soooo tsundere.
It's not every day you get to use the phrase "Masculine wiles" in all seriousness. Yesterday was just such a day...

Now... Oi vey. I'm trying to work out how in the hells I'm going to work the events of Cydonia Rising into WtDwJ, even as a cameo/background. Trying to figure out how in the hell it takes them 5 years to get to Earth... Whatta nightmare.
Cydonia have taken onboard a mysterius device they do not know the purpose of. Maybe it interacred with a jump and sort of artificially kept them from returning to normal space normally and only let them of years later. The real purpose of the device would then be to delay your normal space reentry (with no time used onboard) perhaps as a way to avoid pursuit. The pursued enter a target system way after whoever is hunting them and hopefully they would have given up by then. Essentially it allow a ship to hide in hyperspace by delaying reentry. As an extra bonus the technology may perhaps be adapted to force ships stuck in hyperspace to reenter if good enough jump data for a lost ship is know. If so, some of the ships that didn't make the double jump could be saved, as well as others lost maybe centuries ago. As long it is know where they where lost and their target is know.

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:) The story is actually bigger than that... but the device as I was informed by the GM yes was a part of it as well.
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That was a wonderful intermezzo.

At least she "saw" that not all of the Loroi could've meant to insult her.

Once again, thank you.
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Sweforce wrote:It's not every day you get to use the phrase "Masculine wiles" in all seriousness. Yesterday was just such a day...

Now... Oi vey. I'm trying to work out how in the hells I'm going to work the events of Cydonia Rising into WtDwJ, even as a cameo/background. Trying to figure out how in the hell it takes them 5 years to get to Earth... Whatta nightmare.
Cydonia have taken onboard a mysterius device they do not know the purpose of. Maybe it interacred with a jump and sort of artificially kept them from returning to normal space normally and only let them of years later. The real purpose of the device would then be to delay your normal space reentry (with no time used onboard) perhaps as a way to avoid pursuit. The pursued enter a target system way after whoever is hunting them and hopefully they would have given up by then. Essentially it allow a ship to hide in hyperspace by delaying reentry. As an extra bonus the technology may perhaps be adapted to force ships stuck in hyperspace to reenter if good enough jump data for a lost ship is know. If so, some of the ships that didn't make the double jump could be saved, as well as others lost maybe centuries ago. As long it is know where they where lost and their target is know.[/quote]

That would be... Interesting. Even plausible - hell, if it can adjust gravity to such a high degree, it could be used to facilitate double-jumping, long-jumping... Hell, depending on how powerful it is, if your numbers are good enough, theoretically you could jump straight from Earth to Seren!

Skipping a lot of time like that, though, would be... Problematic, since the age of two Loroi children and one Loroi rescuee became part things. Still... Such a device would be a good big of plot hookery.
sunphoenix wrote::) The story is actually bigger than that... but the device as I was informed by the GM yes was a part of it as well.
The Device. A nice name for it. :)

Also, I could see that becoming a sticking point - the Loroi want it, the Humans are all "our ship recovered it," and neither is willing to capitulate on the issue, so they look at a Loroi vessel under command of a Human captain...
Krulle wrote:That was a wonderful intermezzo.

At least she "saw" that not all of the Loroi could've meant to insult her.

Once again, thank you.
(My boss is of a different opinion, but then this was (a part of) my lunch break I used).
Well, she's not entirely unreasonable! There's a quantum of reasonability in her.
What do you mean your boss is of a different opinion, though? Did he reckon that Opalstorm was in the right or something?

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No. I am spending too much time reading here...
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Maybe Opalstorm can be salvaged if someone where to "knock the stupid" out of her and the first steps of doing that "knock" was to have her sent to the brig.

My suggestion regarding the device on Cydonia was meant as have caused the ship to essentially be frozen in time. Want to go wierd? Maybe it is "too" powerful and causes havoc to the space time continuum over large areas and both back and forth in time. If so it may even have caused the time jump of the ship in the "Calm Seas" story.

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Nobody is commenting about Stillstorm´s `possible reaction when she heards Alex has put her daughter under arrest? I can imagine her subordinates mustering all their courage to resist the instinct of hide in a corner of the Tempest, tembling in fear.

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raistlin34 wrote:Nobody is commenting about Stillstorm's possible reaction when she hears Alex has put her daughter under arrest? I can imagine her subordinates mustering all their courage to resist the instinct of hide in a corner of the Tempest, trembling in fear.
Frankly, Opalstorm should thank her lucky stars, individually and by name, that she's in Jardin's brig and not her mother's.

Remember, Fireblade, Tempo, et al, have served under Stillstorm. They know damn well just out-of-line Opalstorm is, and just how few fucks Stillstorm would give that her daughter was arrested, compared to how angry she would be with Opalstorm when learning just how egregiously out-of-line Opalstorm was.

Not that she'd be happy to hear that the weird pink alien man whom she was dead certain was a shell construct is running a Loroi warship. Which she would have, by now, but they're at least a month racing across the intervening space until she could possibly hear that Opalstorm has been arrested.

But yeah, when she hears about this, she's gonna be furious. It would be wise for her crew to keep their heads down and possibly armored for a while.

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Re: What to Do with Jardin (Fan Fic)

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ShadowDragon8685 wrote:
raistlin34 wrote:Nobody is commenting about Stillstorm's possible reaction when she hears Alex has put her daughter under arrest? I can imagine her subordinates mustering all their courage to resist the instinct of hide in a corner of the Tempest, trembling in fear.
Frankly, Opalstorm should thank her lucky stars, individually and by name, that she's in Jardin's brig and not her mother's.

Remember, Fireblade, Tempo, et al, have served under Stillstorm. They know damn well just out-of-line Opalstorm is, and just how few fucks Stillstorm would give that her daughter was arrested, compared to how angry she would be with Opalstorm when learning just how egregiously out-of-line Opalstorm was.

Not that she'd be happy to hear that the weird pink alien man whom she was dead certain was a shell construct is running a Loroi warship. Which she would have, by now, but they're at least a month racing across the intervening space until she could possibly hear that Opalstorm has been arrested.

But yeah, when she hears about this, she's gonna be furious. It would be wise for her crew to keep their heads down and possibly armored for a while.
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