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- Sun May 05, 2024 8:41 am
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
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Re: A Chorus of Stars
Author’s note: I have changed that Diaderet Sunbeam has also chosen to remain on Deinar with Greywind. Please take a moment to read my comments here before proceeding with the story. I noticed a few fanfic writers on this forum make a separate forum for commentary and another reserved specifically ...
- Fri May 03, 2024 4:31 pm
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Outsider humor thread
- Replies: 188
- Views: 919830
Re: Outsider humor thread
Why do Loroi hate Umiak?
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‘Cause the Umiak won’t stop bugging them!
- Fri May 03, 2024 4:25 am
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Loroi Trade translation request general
- Replies: 350
- Views: 642768
Re: Loroi Trade translation request general
Evil.
*While you're translating, do Loroi have a concept of good and evil? Or was that introduced by, oh say, the Barsam?
*While you're translating, do Loroi have a concept of good and evil? Or was that introduced by, oh say, the Barsam?
- Fri Apr 26, 2024 12:53 am
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: [Wolf329] Fanart - Charge of the blue platoon
- Replies: 184
- Views: 2672092
- Tue Apr 23, 2024 5:43 am
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Loroi Trade translation request general
- Replies: 350
- Views: 642768
Re: Loroi Trade translation request general
Pub or bar
- Wed Apr 17, 2024 2:55 pm
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Outsider humor thread
- Replies: 188
- Views: 919830
Re: Outsider humor thread
What do Teidars and terrorists have in common?
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Terror eyes!
- Mon Apr 15, 2024 7:32 am
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
One of my greatest challenges in writing, I think, has been writing dialogue. And not just dialogue. But compelling dialogue. In this chapter you will find segments which focus on dialogue and others more on third-person narration. One more chapter after this. I hope you enjoy! The Egg Song lyrics ...
- Sun Apr 14, 2024 9:29 am
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
- Replies: 6286
- Views: 5222857
Re: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
Is it particularly difficult for Loroi in general to put on noticeable amounts of muscle? Not gigachad swole type, but more Laura Croft or Wonder Woman style of athleticism. They are noticeably stronger, but not to a ridiculous degree like how most comic books portray heroes. Loroi don't bulk up th...
- Sun Apr 14, 2024 9:27 am
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Forum Issues
- Replies: 12
- Views: 2378
Re: Forum Issues
Not error 500 message. But I do notice that when I submit a post on some forums, the page goes blank and I am forced to retrace a step before posting it again.
- Tue Apr 09, 2024 5:33 am
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
- Replies: 6286
- Views: 5222857
Re: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
Where might some of these enclaves and reserves be on Mestirot?
- Mon Apr 08, 2024 11:23 am
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
- Replies: 6286
- Views: 5222857
Re: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
Do any of the sister worlds have reserves or for primitive Loroi, like the reserves for nomadic tribes or aboriginals on Earth?
- Sun Apr 07, 2024 12:37 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
XXII - The Terrible Truth === (+) === >Remote viewing!< Hope sent excitedly in the observatory room. >The human actually achieved remote viewing!< >Let us not make conclusions so hastily,< Jade warned. >Don’t you realize what we have stumbled upon?!< sent Hope. >Together they received sensory infor...
- Wed Apr 03, 2024 3:49 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
Reminder... again: Chapters 17 to 19 were changed, as was ending of chapter 16. Anyway, I am amazed how quickly I cranked this one out. I hope you enjoy! XXI - A Chorus of Stars === (+) === If there was one other benefit for Greywind to remain on Deinar, it might hasten Project First Son’s progress...
- Tue Apr 02, 2024 1:06 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
Reminder: as I stated in my previous post, so as to not create confusion, I have changed the end of chapter 16 as well as chapters 17 to 19. The original version of the chapters have been saved just in case. But I think this makes for a better story. Though only you the reader can decide if you lik...
- Sun Mar 31, 2024 7:10 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
Incoming message from the Tech Level 16 Spatial Temporal Regulatory Commission: Due to undesirable events leading up to the present, the Tech Level 16 Spatial Temporal Regulatory Commission has ordered an existential reset. Immediate changes shall be noticed by outside observers to the following eve...
- Wed Mar 27, 2024 4:20 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
Arrogance and hubris are perfect narrative methods of causing a character to make a mistake which is obvious to the reader without the character just being stupid for no reason. edit: It would be an interesting way of reconnecting Ben with his mom. By rolling with the original story I've written so...
- Wed Mar 27, 2024 4:19 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
Arrogance and hubris are perfect narrative methods of causing a character to make a mistake which is obvious to the reader without the character just being stupid for no reason. That does seem like a problem in some story and world building. There seem to be inevitable inconsistencies. Any further ...
- Wed Mar 27, 2024 3:55 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
Hey ya'll. I'm afraid I might have written myself into a corner. I had not anticipated until now that, as soon as word of subconscious telepathic contact reaches the gangers' ears, they'll panic. I have some ideas of how this could play out and how the gangers are likely to react. So before I give a...
- Wed Mar 20, 2024 2:40 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: A Chorus of Stars
- Replies: 76
- Views: 256767
Re: A Chorus of Stars
XIX - The Decision === (+) === After the twelfth day of familial celebrations, the guests began slowly leaving the island. A few, including Ashrain, remained as per Greywind’s request, though for what would not be answered until Greywind returned. Every guest took with them a unique memory from the...
- Tue Mar 19, 2024 4:41 pm
- Forum: Outsider Discussion
- Topic: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
- Replies: 6286
- Views: 5222857
Re: Miscellaneous Loroi question-and-answer thread
I understand that all Loroi males are wards of the state and therefore provided for. And this next question perhaps does not apply to the Nedatan order, but are there any menfolk involved in business? Are there any rich male tycoons or magnates? Male entrepreneurs?