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Sorry - I'm not sure who you mean here - Claude or Caitlyn? Claude. As per the new info, are there now two individuals named Kaetlin and Caitlyn? Are they also Tulpas? There is Kaetlin (Alex's girlfriend who is a civilian extensively trained in guns) and Caitlyn (a captain with the TCA who also see...

Don't sell yourself short. All writers seem to worry about how good their story sounds, but you won't know until you publish/post it. And learn from it. A lot of novels have subplots that steer away from the main plot and they seem to do just fine. Look at Game of Thrones. There were plenty of subp...

You seem optimistic thinking the AI and systems will have an actual goal and not just be operating by instinct, much as they currently do. Having a goal would imply true intelligence, and the ability to rely on instinct should come from a similar source. Yet, AIs are merely advanced sorting program...

Thank you for the feedback! Pacing (and perhaps the whole plot in general) are things I'm working on. I have a plan for the story, though it might not be good one. Among other things, the goal of that part was to get everyone to hate Claude, so that part worked. Is your issue the length of Chapter 1...

Chapter Twelve: Dream - Part Three Beryl is standing in the fitting room, still trying to process what had just happened. I was at the mercy of a male. Was it due to his strength? Did I underestimate him because he is male? Not much like a warrior. There are no stories of Tempest being overcome by m...

The tension escalates. God I hate Claude so f#€"ing much! A real monster from the id! I just want to smash his face in with a baseball bat. That was the intended effect, so that is working at least. I want to do the same to Claude :) Despite being trained to be warriors, loroi may very well not be ...

You seem optimistic thinking the AI and systems will have an actual goal and not just be operating by instinct, much as they currently do.

Chapter Twelve: Dream - Part Two Beryl is pleased to see Ellen is still waiting for her on the sidewalk outside of the store. Beryl had not realized she was expected to wear civilian clothes for this until Ellen messaged her as she was finishing posting the memos for Hamilton. I hope this shopping t...

I would hope (for their sake, and humanity's) that the loroi would understand that humanity did not know enough to make a decision before they met either side and would not be too harsh on Alex. On the other hand, Beryl isn't always as logical as she would like to be around Alex. Though Tempo would ...

Nice - an intermission I can place in the story :) I like the motivation for virtualizing consciousness - it feels very realistic and compelling, and also that the plan did not work out. Pretty amazing the risks they decided to take for the mind tuning - though I suppose these were the extremely ded...

Chapter Twelve: Dream - Part One Beryl consults the map on her data pad again, then looks at the nameplate on the nearest door. Maybe she should have asked Alex for help finding the place, but she is enjoying the time away from him. Even with the guilt she feels from that enjoyment. This should be C...

The banter between Greywind and Ben was a bit cringe-worthy at first, but then turned out to be quite hilarious. It must've been a century or two since the Emperor had her children. I guess that the Loroi have not yet grasped Ben's age and level of development relative to their own? They also do no...

Well, I don't know about Alex revealing the matter about the Pocket Historian to the Loroi. It seems way too fast, far too honest, and keeping an ace up the sleeve would be a much better idea. Or disposing of it quietly, at least. Also, he's a milk drinker now! Will he learn Shouts telekinesis next...

Chapter Eleven: Nightmare Beryl and Alex wake up in the culvert they had chosen for their camp. “Do you know what happens when we return to the real world?” Beryl asks. “The sun has moved in the sky, so time still passes. Are our bodies still here?” “No idea,” Alex answers. “I assume we leave someth...

Alex really took a risk to tell Beryl the truth. even in the comic I think Alex feels scared and conflicted about it. And realises that it's hard to determine who is more trustworthy: the pocket Historian or the loroi? It seems totally reasonable seeing how Beryl reacted upon learning the truth. An...

Thanks for answering! We already have a generation that grew up on, or rather, in, the Internet. They learn how to operate computers at the same time they learn how to walk and speak. I guess that in the future, separating reality and cyberspace will become a skill that every child would learn natur...

Really interesting chapters dealing with Alex' backstory. A bit drawn out, but still good. Kaetlin getting jealous was pretty realistic. But Listel serving Teidars? I'd guess they would be assigned to the Mizol instead, and the Teidars would get some combat-oriented Soroin? Also, poor Gary got done...

Chapter Ten: Awake My dreams have definitely grown even stranger. Hopefully Tempo will have some ideas, I haven't talked to her about them lately, Beryl thinks while waking, then stiffens slightly. Alex rolled in his sleep and is pinning her left side. She carefully extricates herself, but he stirs ...

I was wondering what the earliest memories a loroi would likely have - I wasn't sure how to think about it given their faster development than humans.

What age does a Loroi start to form memories? Does it differ for a listel?